I couldn't bring myself to post in the story and chance having my comments break up the flow of a great story.
I have to say I am hooked man. I am glad you decided to bring this over here, its definitely worth lookign at.
Technical comments: I'm no writer, but it flows well. No spelling mistakes I could spot, no grammar mistakes I could spot. So A plus so far in that arena.
Plot wise its coming togetehr nicely, it has just enough smart ass to offset the decriptive portions, which I like. I went back and reread all the stuff I could find with Wedge as a commentator, and I have to wonder if you're the guy who invented him. If you didn't, you've captured him pretty damn nicely.
All in all good work, I look forward to more!
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I can't tell you how much of a compliment I take that. Every single one of us that plays has our favorite character, and my only regret was not making him an original creation. But like I said, I've got the train running now...and I'll be damned if i'm going to stop it. 
Also, as a side note, I noticed in the "Sprawl Survival Guide", there is an excerpt from Captain Chaos labeling Wedge, along with a few others, as being dead.
I almost cried.
Also, as a side note, I noticed in the "Sprawl Survival Guide", there is an excerpt from Captain Chaos labeling Wedge, along with a few others, as being dead.
I almost cried.
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